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    Falling Apart at the Seams (Jimmy/Jacoby)

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    Post  Aightball 3/14/2012, 1:10 am

    One more chapter to go!

    I'm also working on adventure six, which will probably be the final adventure. But who knows with these two?

    32

    My parents have lived here for two weeks now and today is dad’s big trip to Los Angeles. He’s seeing a number of doctors and hopefully he’ll get a good report from all of them. The point of this is to establish a relationship with specialists down there, including a psych doc (he got a couple of recommendations from Dr. Magnus) so that he has people familiar with him when there’s a problem. Of course, this means he might get some new meds and there might be new treatments to try, but if it keeps him healthy, so be it. His memory is doing well with the medication and constant oxygen and his heart is in even better shape since he went on full time oxygen, so fingers are crossed for a good report.

    Myself, I’m enjoying a day off with my girls. Ava is out of school for the summer now, so we’re at the local swimming pool (yes, we have those out here) and while she gets lessons, I’ve got Bethany in the baby pool. It turns out our little one was allergic to milk, and switching her to a milk-free formula did wonders for her. She’s seven months old now and doing great. The doctor said that most kids out grow the allergies by two or three and if she doesn’t, there’s a shot she can get that will gradually cure the allergy. It’s not recommended for infants, though, so we have to wait a couple of years.

    “Mom! Watch me!” Ava called and I waved, moving Bethany and I closer. “I’m going to jump!”

    The instructor was standing in the deeper end of the water and Ava jumped into her arms, grinning. She’s moved through swimming lessons quickly and according to Zach, Garrison was a fish in water as well.

    “Good job!” I cheered, clapping, laughing when Bethany clapped as well. She’s starting to crawl, which means we’ve locked the house down. A baby on the move is a baby that can get into anything, so we have to be prepared. I’ll be glad when Bethany’s in school and I don’t have to fight a child lock to get my morning coffee. “Your sister’s doing a good job, isn’t she?”

    Bethany just chewed on her fingers and I shook my head; I hate teething. I moved her back to the pool, after a quick reapplication of sunscreen. Dad and Jacoby should be joining us at any time, as they were supposed to get back from Los Angeles around five. They’d decided to get a hotel last night, so they were closer since his first appointment was at seven in the morning.

    “Mama.”

    I smiled, helping Bethany float in the water. Of course, she had her floaties on, but that didn’t mean I could let go.

    “Hey Cilla, got Ava’s lesson today?” a voice asked and I looked up, smiling. “So does Colton.”

    I nodded as my friend and co-worker Mark slid into the water with his youngest daughter Abby, who was eight months old.

    “Yep, she’s already leaping from the side into Sophia’s arms, too,” I said, laughing a bit. “Bethany didn’t seem interested, so I brought her over here. How’s Colton doing in his lessons?”

    Mark finished putting Abby’s floaties on then smiled. “Fine so far, luckily. He was so scared of the water at first I didn’t think anything was going to happen. But now he loves it and we have to keep our deck door locked around the clock or he’ll get into our pool. He’s not quite ready for unsupervised swimming.”

    “Neither is Ava, but she thinks she is. I told her she’s got to have one of us out there if she’s in the water, but she doesn’t listen, so we locked our door as well.”

    “Hey!” a voice called and I laughed as my parents walked into the pool are. “Baby time for grandpa!”

    Mark laughed, greeting my parents as well. Now, if you know anything about baby pools, you know these things hold about…two feet of water, tops. So, you can imagine how silly all of us look sitting in this pool, four adults and two infants. Open swim isn’t for another half hour, when my parents will go with Ava and I into the big pool. I have a circular floatie that Bethany can sit up in so she can join us, and she loves it.

    “When does Ava’s lesson end?” Mark asked, looking over at the big pool.

    “Ten minutes and then it’s open swim. I have an extra belted floatie is Abby needs one,” I told him and he nodded, watching his son Colton as he went through a review of the last lesson. I love that about this program, because the kids get a good background in swimming. “So, how did L.A. go?”

    The smile on Jimmy’s face suggested things had gone well. “Very well, actually. I am going to be getting on some new COPD meds, which we expected. But my heart is doing fine and the current meds are keeping me in rhythm. The doctor here, a Dr. McCarthy, did say that if my heart goes into A-Fib again, we’re going straight to a pacer. But otherwise, he can see no reason for any interventions at this time. My new lung doctor, Dr. Adams, says that for a man my age with my history, my COPD is doing pretty well. He’s going to keep me on oxygen for the foreseeable future, just in case, but otherwise he feels with the new meds, I’ll be able to do quite well. And my new psych doc is also encouraged. So, it seems that so far things are going well.”

    I nodded, watching Ava as she finished her lesson. “That’s good. Let’s hope things continue to go well. We love having you guys out here.”

    He hugged me, as Bethany splashed some water at him. He took her from me and helped her float a bit, laughing as she continued to splash. “We love being here. We should’ve done this a long time ago, Priscilla. We’ve missed out on far too much, but we know we can’t change that. We just have to finish getting settled, which is going smoothly so far. Dad has been really good about helping us blend the houses and things are looking great there as well.”

    I honestly could not be happier right now. Everyone was in good health, my parents were out in California, and I wouldn’t trade this for the world.

    ***

    “Is everything ready?” I asked, and Eliza nodded, as we watched Kelly and Katie pulled into my driveway. We’d decided to have a surprise party for our parents to celebrate dad’s 40th year of sobriety, their 45th anniversary, and their arrival three weeks ago in California. Uncle Matt had brought his tattoo gear and was going to tattoo dad’s 40th year coin on his right shoulder blade as a permanent reminder of what he’d achieved. “Hide!”

    Just in time, everyone ducked out of sight, as Kelly lead our folks in. She was making small talk, a gift she’d inherited from grandma and if my parents suspected anything, it didn’t show on their faces. I’d reminded everyone that Jimmy scared easily and to be mindful of his heart, and figured everyone would still get a good laugh out of scaring them.

    Nodding to those that were visible, we all gave the silent signal to jump from our spots.

    “SURPRISE!” we all shouted and sure enough, Jimmy yelped, a hand to his chest as he started to laugh.

    “Fuck you guys,” he blurted out, then blushed, covering his mouth. “Oops.”

    I laughed, hugging him tight, the nurse in me noting that his heart rhythm was nice and normal. “No big deal, dad. We decided to throw you a little surprise party.”

    “Clearly,” he deadpanned before he burst out laughing again. “What are we celebrating?”

    “Your 40th year of sobriety, your 45th wedding anniversary, and your arrival back home,” Eliza explained, hugging our parents. “We figured one party for everything was easier.”

    “Grandpas!” Marianna shouted, toddling over. Jimmy swooped her into his arms, dangling her over his head for a moment before settling her onto his hip. She’d be two in September but she seemed older than her year. “Love you!”

    I smiled, as Eliza snapped pictures. The grandkids were especially excited about the party and having their grandparents right here in town, and I grabbed my own camera to take some pictures as well. The party was going well, and soon we’d eat. I saw Jacoby wander outside with Zach, who had Ava with him. She understood what had caused us to adopt her and called Zach and Gena grandpa and grandma. Having an extra set of grandparents didn’t seem to bother her in the least, and I was glad.

    “Hey, Cilla, I’m going to take Jimmy for his tat, since it won’t take long,” Matt said and I nodded, noting the happy look on dad’s face. “Have fun!”

    “I will,” he promised, following Matt upstairs. We wanted that done in private but not at the shop, since dad could be a bit emotional about it, which was understandable. “Back soon!”

    I went outside to find Jacoby by the grill, as I thought he might be. My parents really aren’t typical gay people, which I’ve always admired in them. I’ve had people act surprised to find out that I had two dads because they don’t fit into a stereotype. I hugged Jacoby, as he helped Clayton with the burgers, then moved to find Randi.

    “How’s it going?” I asked, accepting a bottle of water from her. We kept the party dry for Jimmy, which I know he’ll appreciate. “I see Zach is soaking up time with Ava and Vanessa. He’s a great grandpa and so great with the kids. I know Garrison has caused them some headaches, but I think he’s excited now.”

    She nodded, relaxing a bit in her lounge chair. “Yes, he is. Just like our parents. Remember how shocked they were when Eliza got pregnant the first time?”

    I laughed, almost spitting water from my mouth. “I do! I thought Jimmy was going to die!” I exclaimed, shaking my head. “Oh my lord. But when the shock wore off, it was the best news of their life. They make some killer grandparents. And now they are closer to spoil them rotten. Heaven help us all.”

    Randi laughed, lightly punching me, no doubt for the religious reference. I might be a staunch atheist, but that doesn’t mean common phrases don’t’ slip out from time to time. “Well, if they want to take the girls for a weekend, I won’t complain.”

    I blushed when I realized what she was implying and shook my head. “What weekend should we book them for?”

    “Who’s being booked for a weekend?” Jacoby asked, joining us and accepting water from Randi. She was manning the cooler like a vending machine and I almost offered to put a quarter in her.

    “You and dad sometime to take the girls. Not right away, of course, but we might book you guys sometime. Randi has some ideas,” I explained, ducking the swat aimed at my head.

    Jacoby laughed, shaking his head. “TMI, daughter, TMI. But any time you want a weekend, just let us know. I decided not to work at the hospital so for right now, I’m free. Still might get a little job, but not in a hurry. So just let us know when you want a weekend, and we’ll be all yours.”

    I grinned, as Jimmy came out in time for the food to be done. “Time to eat,” I announced, going over to see the new tattoo. Dad pulled his shirt down a bit and I grinned, seeing it through the plastic. “Looks good.”

    “I love it, thank you,” he said, hugging me. His eyes were a bit red and wet, and I knew he’d cried when he got the tattoo. It’s a big reminder of all that he’s been through. “This is all I needed for celebration.”

    I smiled as I joined the food line. “And getting an entire wing of the hospital named after you.”

    He laughed, taking a plate and grabbing a bun. “True. That was a little bit of overkill, but I was still honored. Hopefully, they can continue to help other people through their addictions. If it does that, that honors me more than putting my name on something.”

    I had to agree, as Clayton put a hamburger down for me and I headed for a side table set with side dishes. It seemed right, having our family and extended family all together in my backyard for a party. We’ll have to do this more often, I think. I smiled at grandpa as he got his food together and went to sit with Johnny and his wife who had Bethany.

    “That’s a rather large cake,” dad commented, noting the sheet cake we’d gotten for the event. “How many cakes are there?”

    “Just two full sheets. This is quite a crowd, of course, and they all happen to like cake with extra frosting. So we got two just to make sure everyone could have some.”

    He laughed, piling some macaroni salad on his plate. “True. Be sure to save me a corner piece, then, because you know how I love cake.”

    I almost dropped my plate for laughing so hard. Settling at Johnny’s table, I crossed my legs and spread a napkin over them. Having everyone over was making my day and I couldn’t be happier. As I started to eat, I smiled at my parents, glad to have them out here. I don’t know what the future brings, but we’re off to a good start.
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    Post  CiaraCobb 3/15/2012, 5:44 pm

    For an instalment called "Falling Apart at the Seams" I guess I was expecting something quite unsettling to happen, but I'm so glad that life has gone this way for Jack and Jim.

    So is there one more chapter to go after this or was that it?
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    Post  Aightball 3/16/2012, 12:42 am

    The title is very misleading and I do apologize for that...needless to say, I had a far different tract in mind for this when we started and the boys said "uhm, hell no". I need to re-title it, but I don't know what else to call it. The sixth installment would fit the title so much better.

    There is one more chapter coming today once I get it edited =). That will be the concluding chapter on this adventure (an adventure I'm not as happy with...might be the first one I'm not 100% in love with), but we will get it wrapped up.

    Any title ideas?
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    Post  Aightball 3/16/2012, 1:25 am

    33

    A year goes by so fast. It doesn’t seem possible that just a year ago, Jacoby and I made a tough decision to leave our farm and come to California. Our grandkids have grown like weeds in the last year and we’ve been glad to be here for it. Ava started taking tap dance lessons and Corey has discovered a love of art. Bethany is inching her way toward being two, and Rhiannon is almost as tall as her brother now (or so it seems) and excelling at school. I’m so proud of our grandkids that I might burst.

    I did end up doing part time photography with Clayton and have found a new love. Jacoby decided to stay retired for now, helping out at a local bookstore a couple days a week. But I was going stir crazy sitting around the house, so working was better for me.

    “Jimmy, you’re appointment is here,” Clayton said and I nodded, heading out front to greet Priscilla and Randi. It was time for an updated family picture, now that school was out for the summer. “Eliza should be here later for ours.”

    “And you’re doing dad, Jacoby, and me, right?” I clarified, as I waited for them to change.

    Clayton nodded, as his next appointment arrived. His business was thriving and I was proud of my son-in-law. When Priscilla and her family were ready, I brought them into the studio first. We’d be doing outdoor shots as well, but starting inside worked better for the sun’s position.

    “Ready guys?” I asked, as Ava hurried in. Bethany held Randi’s hand and toddled in, her little legs going as fast as they could. “Now, Bethany, you have to be good and smile, okay?”

    Our youngest granddaughter was turning into a little pistol. It was cute to me, but she kept her parents busy. I waited for everyone to settle in, then began posing them. Once I was happy, I took a few shots, then re-positioned them for another series of shots.

    “Can we go outside?” Ava asked and I laughed, shaking my head. “Why not, grandpa?”

    I smiled, stepping out from behind the camera. “Well, for starters, the sun is just a bit too much in our way. Remember that I talked about the sun and how it can ruin pictures?” she nodded. “If we go out now, the sun will be in our way. So, I’m going to work inside for a bit longer and then we’ll go outside, cool?”

    She nodded, smiling. “Cool, grandpa.”

    “Okay. Ava, I want to get some shots of just you. Come here and pick out two backgrounds.”

    I showed her to my computer and gave her five to choose from. Her tastes are similar to Cilla’s, in that she’s into darker colors, skulls, that sort of thing. She got a note sent home from the teacher because she wore a t-shirt from Jaded Angel with their signature tat on it, but Cilla and Randi told the teacher to get stuffed. Politely, of course. Ava also has “tattoos” from time to time that Eliza paints on her with body paint. I know her future is in tattoos, but she’s only seven, so we’ve got a few years to go.

    “That one and that one,” she declared, picking out exactly the ones I thought she would. One background was black, purple, and silver with a skull with batwings on it (something Zach created about ten years ago upon a customer request), and the other was black and purple only.

    “Okay, let’s get started,” I said, as Cilla and Randi helped Bethany pick her two backgrounds. “Smile!”

    I posed and snapped photos of Ava for about half an hour and then Bethany got her turn. The girls were excited and I was glad to be able to make great family portraits for my kids. I love my family and am patting myself on the back for the choice to come out here.

    ***

    “These look great!” dad said, as we hung the newest picture of the three of us on the wall. It was the first picture dad had had taken since mom died (which was coming up on three years already), but he was smiling. “Clayton is very good at taking pictures. I really like them.”

    I nodded, looking at the picture wall, smiling. Jacoby was at the bookstore right now, but he’d be off by noon, so he’d be able to see the portraits. They really did look great, with neutral yet not boring backgrounds.

    “We were all smiling, at least,” I joked and dad laughed a bit, nodding. There’d be some arguments in the first days we were out here, but we were finally getting things figured out so everyone had their private time. “Good thing we waited this long.”

    Dad slapped my arm but he was laughing. “I’m just glad you guys have been here this last year. I think you were right to move out here.”

    I hugged him for a moment, as we moved into the living room. “I know we were right to move out here. My marriage is stronger than ever and look what we would’ve missed with the grandkids. I know we had some reservations, but in the end, we did the right thing. I’m happy, Jacoby is happy and you seem happy as well.”

    Dad nodded, slowly lowering himself into his chair. He was 92 now and moving slower by the day. He refused to go into a care home, though, so Jacoby and I did as much as we could for him. I noticed the grimace on his face and knew his other hip was bothering him, though he refused to get this one fixed.

    “Hip problems today?” I asked, glancing outside. My leg was bothering, too, and that meant rain. “Looks like rain.”

    Sure enough, a crack of lightning preceded a loud rumble of thunder and we both nodded. “Guess that answers that,” dad said, and I nodded, as the dark clouds rolled in. “I suppose you’ve missed the summer storms.”

    I nodded. “I have. I don’t miss winter but I do miss summer in Iowa. I’ve been keeping in touch with friends out there and guess I’ve missed some pretty good storms. Tony and his wife moved to Mississippi six months ago and he said the weather there is perfect. They get some winter, but not what Iowa gets. It’s hard to believe the changes of the last year, you know? Jacoby and I left a farm we swore we’d never leave, Tony and Ann left a farm they swore they’d never leave, Hollister and Randy are getting ready to sell their farm and move to Oklahoma, where he’s from; it’s all changing out there. Young families are going to be living on our farms and doing what we did for over forty years. The crew at Creighton is getting younger again, as more and more people retire. Sean and his husband are grandparents now, too, and Racheal from dispatch is retiring at the end of the year. How did this happen? How did forty six years go by so fast? Forty six years ago, Jacoby and I were newlyweds and I was a druggie and an alcoholic. Now, I’m a father, grandfather, photographer, I made a name for myself in the medical industry…how did that happen?”

    Dad shrugged, adjusting a bit in his chair. “Just like 92 years happened to me. Time goes on whether we want it to or not. We all long for the days when we didn’t have a care in the world or were just married and childless. I miss the days when I could still work and have kids to raise at home. But now I’ve got to accept that I’m a great-grandfather and I wouldn’t trade those kids for the world. I’m a widower who has proved that he can live without his wife and still be okay. I’m a retiree who has avoided all the pitfalls of retirement. For the most part, I’ve got my health, and I’m okay with that. Change is something we can’t control, Jim. When you started at Creighton you replaced an outgoing group of folks who were retiring or moving on in their lives. And that’s a cycle that never stops. The young kids doing your job now will soon be where you and Jacoby are.”

    I couldn’t argue with that, I thought, as rain pelted the windows of dad’s house. “True. I guess because I lost some time in there without you guys that it seems cruel how time moved on. I made a lot of mistakes, I ruined a lot of my life, but somehow, I got more chances. I really wish I could take back the ten years we lost, dad, I really do.”

    He joined me on the couch and put an arm around my shoulder. “I wish we could take it back, too, but we can’t. The point there is that we’ve made up for it since we’ve been reunited. Your mom was so happy for the years she had despite what she lost. She lost a lot of sleep when you were missing but she made up for it since we found you. Know that she was happy with what she had with you and her grandchildren, okay?”

    I nodded, sighing, as the storm raged on outside. Jacoby walked in shaking the water from his hair as he hung up his jacket and kicked off his shoes. I smiled, as he greeted me with a kiss, laughing when dad pretended to be grossed out.

    “Oh dad, whatever,” I joked as Jacoby sat next to dad. “How was work?”

    Jacoby shrugged. “It was fine. No stress, no one died, so I think we’re good. Happy endings in most of the books as well.”

    As you might’ve guessed, our decision not to return to the medical field was doing wonders for our stress levels. Our days of saving lives were mostly over, though I had responded to an accident I witnessed the other day. As professionals, though, we are retired and our licenses will expire in due time.

    “How was your day?” he asked, leaning back on the couch a bit.

    “It was fine. Dad and I went to his check up, he refused to get a new hip, we went grocery shopping, got our family pictures and hung them up. Now we’re just sitting around talking.”

    Jacoby damn near bolted to his feet, as dad and I followed at a more sedate pace to go see the new pictures.

    “They look awesome! Clayton does such a good job of not making us look overly posed. I’m impressed and very, very happy!”

    I couldn’t argue with that, as I looked at the pictures once again. We’d all dressed casually and it looked like we were all relaxed. Hugging my husband, I kissed his cheek, pleased once again with our choice to move out here.

    “We made the right choice getting these done,” he told me and I nodded, as we helped dad back to his chair. The rain against the windows sounded a bit like it was mixed with hail and inside, I was glad. He flipped on a nearby radio and sure enough, we were under a severe thunderstorm warning.

    Watching the storm outside, I felt content for once in my life. I’d always told myself I was content and happy in Iowa, but I don’t know if that was always true. I think Iowa was an escape and now that I’m home, I can see it for that. I know that I was quite happy there for a long time, but before we moved, I was getting restless. I never told Jacoby but old urges were coming forward, something my counselor said was a likely product of the stress of mom’s passing. Those urges passed with time, but it wasn’t until we really got out here that things settled back down again. I think that will be my secret for a while, possibly for the rest of my life. Sometimes, he doesn’t need to know things and I don’t want him to get upset, considering I battled those demons myself and won.

    ***

    It seemed that, as fast as our first year out here went, the approach of mom’s third year anniversary arrived even faster. We were calmer this time, our emotions better in check, but it was still a hard day for all of us. We made mom’s favorite meals for dinner and supper, went to her grave and placed flowers, spoke to her, and helped dad through the difficult day. He said the church had her on their prayer list this time of year and I know his religion brought him some comfort. I had a dream that mom and I sat and talked and that is what brought me comfort.

    That night, Jacoby and I snuggled into bed, smiling. “I love you. I’m sorry we didn’t do this sooner,” he said, kissing my hand.

    “Me, too, but that’s in the past now,” I assured him, yawning. “See you in the morning, honey.”

    He nodded, as we both drifted off to sleep. I suffer from insomnia now and again and when I woke up at three, wide awake, I knew I was screwed for the remainder of the night. I first started reading, but had a feeling I couldn’t shake. Unable to settle, I put my book down and checked on Jacoby; he was fine, sleeping soundly. The cats were curled up in their cat beds, all four of them, sleeping soundly, as I checked on them on the hallway. I opened dad’s room, seeing if he was up, but he was in bed, sleeping soundly as well. But something made me move forward and sit next to him. As I thought, he was indeed sleeping quite soundly.

    “I suppose it was only fair,” I whispered, taking his cold hand. “Did mom come for you?”

    Of course, there was no answer, as a chill settled into his room. I would have to wake Jacoby, get the ambulance here, make arrangements. But for now, I wanted just a couple more minutes with my dad. He’d always thought he’d make it years without mom, but he’d made it one year exactly. I have no doubt that he passed before midnight, as that would only be fitting. I didn’t know how I was going to live without my dad, but he had 92 great years and now he can be with mom wherever that is. I lightly kissed his cold forehead and then sighed, standing.

    “Love you, dad,” I told him, and turned to leave the room, going to get my husband. “Take good care of mom, Penny, mama, and papa, okay?”

    With that, I closed the door, and let the first tears fall.

    ***

    Fin.

    Thoughts?

    I'm not as happy with this adventure...so critique me. What let you down in this one? What would you change? What different title would you give it? Also looking for just an overall critique. I know we didn't have near the subscribers or readers this time, so are people beginning to tire of J&J?

    When I first started writing this, I had a lot of things in mind. Things were going to go to shit for Jimmy quite early on and stay that way. But as usual, J&J get a say in what happens and they weren't having it. So, things started to change, chapters got re-written and the entire plot got reworked. I think we have a good story, but I'm not 100% in love with this adventure. So, rip into me, let me know what you're thinking! I am working on adventure six, which I think is already going better, so hopefully we'll be able to tie the series together and end it on a good note in adventure six.
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    Post  the mice endure 3/16/2012, 2:07 pm

    I need to set aside time to read this whole series properly...lol. I swear I will Very Happy
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    Post  Aightball 3/16/2012, 2:16 pm

    No worries =). It's going to wrap up in adventure 6, as I think I'm losing my fanbase, but I wanted to wrap things up regardless. Hope you enjoy it!
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    Post  CiaraCobb 3/16/2012, 5:51 pm

    You've never lost me, I intend to see J&J through to whatever conclusion they give you.

    I have to say that while I never found it hard to work out who was narrating chapters previously, with the addition of Cilla and Eliza's voices things did get a bit muddy sometimes, especially if I was catching up on a couple of chapters together.

    I always suck at title ideas, always have always will, all my brain is coming up with (please bear in mind it isn't even 8am) is "Everything Changes". Which leaves you with a bit of ambiguity as to how things are going to unfold, but fits quite well. But you are the author, it's up to you my dear.

    Bittersweet ending had me a little bit choked up I must admit, it's been a crazy year for this family and I'm very sad to see Joe go. I hope that Jimmy can lost himself in the rest of his family now that they are so much closer in order to help him deal with this loss better than he has others in the past.
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    Post  Aightball 3/17/2012, 12:43 am

    I like that title...I might actually use that =). That way, I can confuse the hell out of people by calling adventure six what I call 5, lol!

    I wondered if the voices got a bit muddy...and it's going to get worse in six. I think I'll start putting the name of the character at the start of the chapter so that everyone knows who's speaking. Even I get confused sometimes!

    I'm glad you're along for the ride =). I'm going to do one more, because I think it's important to tie things up and not leave anything hanging. I'm working through that now, and it's got some sad moments already. But it's how things apparently need to go for our guys, and I think it's going to make 6 a little more cohesive.

    I'm glad you enjoyed this tale =). I'll probably do the title change...though I'll have to change the banner, but that's okay.
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    Post  CiaraCobb 3/17/2012, 4:30 am

    This was 5 right? I've lost track...
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    Post  Aightball 3/17/2012, 4:32 am

    Yes, that was five =)...for a set of stories I couldn't envision going much past one or two!
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    Post  CiaraCobb 3/17/2012, 6:45 pm

    But it's Jack and Jim, and there's so much of their lives we've shared!
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    Post  Aightball 3/18/2012, 12:41 am

    I know =). And I keep thinking that there could always be adventures filling in the parts of their lives we've skipped, how they met (if they'll ever let me write it!), etc. When I first wrote these two it, it was my first slash (I wasn't sure I wanted to get into slash), and it was a challenge: can I write in first person? I always said I couldn't do it. So, this is what popped up. Then, I decided to post it and see what happened...I didn't realize they were going to be so popular. This time around, we didn't have the readers/subscribers, but I suspect I have 'keepers', if you will, that will always subscribe and read, no matter what.

    So, we'll see what happens after adventure six. I'm working on a (so far) two (might be three) shot with these two before they started dating for a contest, so we'll see what happens with that =).
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    Post  CiaraCobb 3/19/2012, 5:33 pm

    Sounds interesting. Well you know I'm a 'Keeper' so I'll see you on the thread for story 6!

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